This is part of a series of blog posts where members of the 6med team attach and comment on their own medicine Personal Statements. Ali (one of our co-founders) applied to study Medicine at Cambridge, Imperial, UCL and Kings and received offers from Cambridge, Imperial and Kings.
Please be aware that these examples are meant purely for the sake of inspiration, and should absolutely NOT be used as a model around which to base your own Personal Statement. UCAS have a rather strict system that detects plagiarism – more details can be found here.
Personal Statement and Comments
Standard introduction. I opened with an interesting example from work experience – obviously, this kind of introduction means you have to know a decent amount about what a triple heart bypass is, what it’s used for etc.
One of the benefits of doing work experience in a different country is that you can always make some interesting comments when you compare/contrast their healthcare system with the NHS. I haven’t specified how many “different hospitals” I visited – the names and numbers of hospitals is pretty irrelevant.
In all honesty, I don’t particularly like this paragraph. It lacks a clear sense of style, but it does name-drop 5 years in St. John Ambulance, which can only be a good thing.
A few points here – firstly, the name of the school is irrelevant, and would have been a waste of words had I included it. Secondly, it’s generally a good idea to mention a specific patient/student, rather than making solely general comments about the experience of working with the patients/students as a whole. Thirdly, working at a maths study centre doesn’t have much of an explicit relationship with Medicine, so it requires a quick sentence to link it back and make it relevant to Medicine.
The classic technique of mentioning a book that you’ve “read”. I threw this paragraph in because I was applying to Cambridge and Imperial, two universities renowned for their “love of science”. Although interestingly, it was only in my King’s interview that I was actually asked anything about this book/neurology. Obviously, if you’re mentioning a book in your personal statement, you need to be able to talk about it, so be very careful about saying you’ve read something you actually haven’t, or mentioning a really complicated book that you don’t really understand.
Always good to end with a quick paragraph about extra-curricular activities. I think I’ve got a decent, quirky bunch of things here which are all interesting topics of conversation at interviews. I was fully prepared to answer questions about what web design, magic and/or hypnosis had to do with Medicine – if you’re someone (like me) who doesn’t have the classic “I played football at county level” or “I’m a diploma pianist”, it’s helpful to have one or two interesting activities/hobbies that you can talk passionately about.
Standard conclusion. Not reinventing the wheel, just drawing it together in a nice, somewhat cliched fashion.
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